Post by Luna Lovegood on Mar 14, 2011 22:22:41 GMT -5
Here is a short story I'm writing, it's a comedy much closer to my strength than the other story you read of mine.I've written a lot more than this I'm just not ready to show it to people yet.
keep in mind i only glanced at it quickly and didn't do a full proof read. Also it's a first draft!
Pls tell me any thoughts you have on it so far.
12:51 On graduation day. A beautiful, sunny San Francisco day, with Hundreds of family members and friends who are watching their loved ones (or people they pretend to love, but secretly want them to die a painful death that involves a golf cart, and boiling hot nacho cheese) get their diplomas and graduate high school.
12:52 So there I was on stage getting my diploma, with family members who may or may not want me to die a death involving scalping hot nacho cheese. My principle, a middle age man no taller the 5 feet, balding, glasses, and whatever other stereo types a principle normally has. He’s their shaking my hand.
Anyway… He hands my diploma and I put my bronze medal in the 100 meter sprint at the county champs to task, and run sprinting off the stage. I ran past the parents who were taking pictures with their new Nikon cameras, trying to get the best shot of their kid who just graduated(including my dad might I add). I run off school grounds, and started walking casually down a hilly a san fransisco street.
12:52.008 My phone starts vibrating like crazy. I lifted my fancy blue robe so I could reach into my jean pockets, and grab my phone. I scrolled threw a few text messages that said the fallowing:
“omg you actually did it”
“YOU’RE A LEGAND MAN”
“WTF?
And finally
“I’ll meet you at the rendezvous point bro, epic job.”
I was pretty sure the last text message was already typed up before I ran off stage because it had proper grammar, punctuation, and rendezvous was spelled correctly( A feet I believe no one can do without a dictionary or being able to google it , and due to the fact it only took there was only like .8 mili seconds, I’m guessing, she wouldn’t have had time for either one of the two options).
You’re probably wondering why I ran off stage. You see, me and my friends, had planed to run off stage, as our senior prank…. I know it was a lame senior prank, but here is why we did it.
At the school I went to, anyone caught doing a senior would not be able to graduate. And me and my friends felt that sneaking into the school at night wearing ski masks was over done. So since we didn’t want to do that, And due to the fact we would already have our diplomas in hand and technically gradated, we could do it.
1:02 I arrived at thee rendezvous point…. It was a 7-11.… I know 7-11 wasn’t the epic meet up place you were excepting , but hey, they have Slurpees, and I love me some slurpees.
1:08 I was drinking my Slurpee when a really beautiful girl walked in. She had long blond hair, with bangs covering her for head, she has big green eyes which you can just gaze into and lose your thoughtd. She was wearing converse sneakers, jeans and a tight T-shirt that said ”If you’re reading this shirt STOP STAIRING AT MY BODY YOUR PERV!!!! ”
“Yo,” I said as she walked closer to me.
“Lucy, and Jim bailed“ said the girl looking pissed off .
“Don’t worry Emma , there is ten of us, I find it hard to believe that more than two will miss it.”
“Whatever you say”.
1:15 “ No one is coming.“ Said Emma annoyed .
“Common it’s been like 5 minutes, I’m 100 hundred percent sure people will come.”
1:30 “’hundred percent sure, really Thomas?
“I’m 43 percent sure now,” I said joking. Emma stared at me like , like she was going to rip off my head. “I’m joking,” I said reassuringly.” Those graduations go on for hours”.
“That’s true,” she replied, she went on to say “but the graduation started at Ten and it’s now one-thirty and the graduation is now ending.”
2:00, I have just finished my Slurpee, I thnk that‘s a bad omen.
2:02 Emma stood up, ”Well this was the worst senior prank in history”.
“Common we can’t be any worse than Van Goh, I mean he cut off his freaking ear for his senior prank thinking people would find it funny.”
She giggles then started walking forward . I asked “where are you going?” She looked back than responded “ I’m going to the moon” she said mockingly. ”Where do you think I’m going? Common we’re going on with the plan”
“With just us?”
“Yeah and we’re going to have to great time then upload all the pictures to Facebook and make everyone regret skipping out on the plan.” She turns around then said “smile” a bright light flashes in front of my face.
”I said smile you fool, you don’t look happy enough. The bright light flashes again. She smiles at me “much better“.
2:23 We arrive at San Francisco 4th and King Street Station, and I’m handed my ticket.
keep in mind i only glanced at it quickly and didn't do a full proof read. Also it's a first draft!
Pls tell me any thoughts you have on it so far.
12:51 On graduation day. A beautiful, sunny San Francisco day, with Hundreds of family members and friends who are watching their loved ones (or people they pretend to love, but secretly want them to die a painful death that involves a golf cart, and boiling hot nacho cheese) get their diplomas and graduate high school.
12:52 So there I was on stage getting my diploma, with family members who may or may not want me to die a death involving scalping hot nacho cheese. My principle, a middle age man no taller the 5 feet, balding, glasses, and whatever other stereo types a principle normally has. He’s their shaking my hand.
Anyway… He hands my diploma and I put my bronze medal in the 100 meter sprint at the county champs to task, and run sprinting off the stage. I ran past the parents who were taking pictures with their new Nikon cameras, trying to get the best shot of their kid who just graduated(including my dad might I add). I run off school grounds, and started walking casually down a hilly a san fransisco street.
12:52.008 My phone starts vibrating like crazy. I lifted my fancy blue robe so I could reach into my jean pockets, and grab my phone. I scrolled threw a few text messages that said the fallowing:
“omg you actually did it”
“YOU’RE A LEGAND MAN”
“WTF?
And finally
“I’ll meet you at the rendezvous point bro, epic job.”
I was pretty sure the last text message was already typed up before I ran off stage because it had proper grammar, punctuation, and rendezvous was spelled correctly( A feet I believe no one can do without a dictionary or being able to google it , and due to the fact it only took there was only like .8 mili seconds, I’m guessing, she wouldn’t have had time for either one of the two options).
You’re probably wondering why I ran off stage. You see, me and my friends, had planed to run off stage, as our senior prank…. I know it was a lame senior prank, but here is why we did it.
At the school I went to, anyone caught doing a senior would not be able to graduate. And me and my friends felt that sneaking into the school at night wearing ski masks was over done. So since we didn’t want to do that, And due to the fact we would already have our diplomas in hand and technically gradated, we could do it.
1:02 I arrived at thee rendezvous point…. It was a 7-11.… I know 7-11 wasn’t the epic meet up place you were excepting , but hey, they have Slurpees, and I love me some slurpees.
1:08 I was drinking my Slurpee when a really beautiful girl walked in. She had long blond hair, with bangs covering her for head, she has big green eyes which you can just gaze into and lose your thoughtd. She was wearing converse sneakers, jeans and a tight T-shirt that said ”If you’re reading this shirt STOP STAIRING AT MY BODY YOUR PERV!!!! ”
“Yo,” I said as she walked closer to me.
“Lucy, and Jim bailed“ said the girl looking pissed off .
“Don’t worry Emma , there is ten of us, I find it hard to believe that more than two will miss it.”
“Whatever you say”.
1:15 “ No one is coming.“ Said Emma annoyed .
“Common it’s been like 5 minutes, I’m 100 hundred percent sure people will come.”
1:30 “’hundred percent sure, really Thomas?
“I’m 43 percent sure now,” I said joking. Emma stared at me like , like she was going to rip off my head. “I’m joking,” I said reassuringly.” Those graduations go on for hours”.
“That’s true,” she replied, she went on to say “but the graduation started at Ten and it’s now one-thirty and the graduation is now ending.”
2:00, I have just finished my Slurpee, I thnk that‘s a bad omen.
2:02 Emma stood up, ”Well this was the worst senior prank in history”.
“Common we can’t be any worse than Van Goh, I mean he cut off his freaking ear for his senior prank thinking people would find it funny.”
She giggles then started walking forward . I asked “where are you going?” She looked back than responded “ I’m going to the moon” she said mockingly. ”Where do you think I’m going? Common we’re going on with the plan”
“With just us?”
“Yeah and we’re going to have to great time then upload all the pictures to Facebook and make everyone regret skipping out on the plan.” She turns around then said “smile” a bright light flashes in front of my face.
”I said smile you fool, you don’t look happy enough. The bright light flashes again. She smiles at me “much better“.
2:23 We arrive at San Francisco 4th and King Street Station, and I’m handed my ticket.
